Okay, I have about ten Sentence Lites done. (There are a lot of really short scenes in Chapter 2.) One of them was a bad sentence that I posted earlier:
So as a reminder, here’s the old Sentence:
And here is my new card:
Not perfect, but switching the POV definitely helped. At least there’s a conflict now.
Hi, Emily.
I'm not up to the card lesson yet, but thanks for giving that example from your WIP. It looks like a technique that will be really useful to me. I tend to be a bit too woolly with what I need to achieve!
Hope